Another swing and a miss on the Kindle freebie romances. This would be maybe a 3 star book - a pleasant Regency romance, though predictable and not weAnother swing and a miss on the Kindle freebie romances. This would be maybe a 3 star book - a pleasant Regency romance, though predictable and not well written, sorry - but I'm docking it a full star for, seriously, the WORST spelling and punctuation I've seen in a long, long time. Random capitalization in the middle of sentences ("What The Dowager didn't understand"), apostrophes in plural words and other words ending in “s” that don't need them ("The new Countess send's her apologies"), commas sneaking out of sentences they should have been in ("Their lips exploring demanding more") and into sentences where they don't belong ("Now he rolled his eyes, 'I doubt it, besides. It is not just you...' ").
But my FAVORITES were the misspellings! Like these:
"... the man understood his very lively hood depended upon his next statement." Which made me think of this:
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Even better: "the chicken coup." Somewhere there's a gang of chickens plotting to overthrow the government.
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The plot is cute if totally unrealistic: wealthy and handsome (of course) duke, Norwich, goes incognito at his friend's newly inherited estate so he can investigate why the estate isn't making as much money as it should. While roaming the estate he comes across lovely Anne Stafford up in an apple tree, stealing apples because she and her two younger sisters and their aunt ("Aunt Ester," who is apparently a chemical compound in disguise) are so impoverished. They chat, the tree branch breaks and he catches her, and it's love or at least lust at first sight. Norwich doesn't tell her he's actually a duke, but he knows there's no way he can pursue a relationship with a destitute commoner. Too bad fate has other plans ...
Anyway, it's cute if you like super fluffy, rather silly romances (with some steaminess, though it's pretty much all post-marriage) as long as you don't mind that the author apparently used a 5th 3rd grader to do her proofreading.
Kindle freebie romance time again! Nineteen year old Christine Devon, raised in the country and enthusiastic about horses, is on the verge of making hKindle freebie romance time again! Nineteen year old Christine Devon, raised in the country and enthusiastic about horses, is on the verge of making her debut in London society. Her hardhearted widowed father is counting on her making a match that will benefit their family. But her social graces are lacking despite her beauty and intelligence (a little improbable, but just roll with it), and she becomes aware of it after stepping in it at a couple of neighborhood parties. More improbably, she lands on the idea of asking Thomas Gilbert, a handsome young man she knows, to help her be a better conversationalist. And, oh yes, a better flirt too. Let's not forget that!
As they secretly meet for Christine's social lessons, the inevitable (in romance novels anyway) starts to happen. But there's a major barrier: Tom is DEFINITELY not wealthy or titled enough to satisfy Christine's father.
The Social Tutor has a draggy start ... and middle ... and I was starting to skim ... but it picks up nicely toward the end. The writing is decent for a self-published book, but there are a few noticeable spelling errors, like "his son poured over their records" (it's "pored"). It does get bonus points for using - not once, but twice - my favorite misspelling in Regency romances: "ring a peel". Bells peal, oranges peel!...more
A little bit of Christmas romance fluff that I picked up as a Kindle freebie and whipped through in an hour or so, as a palate cleanser between heavieA little bit of Christmas romance fluff that I picked up as a Kindle freebie and whipped through in an hour or so, as a palate cleanser between heavier reads. Keira is a young single mother who owns a chocolate shop. She was widowed a year or so ago by a tragic auto accident that killed her husband, which has left her with a major phobia of driving in snow. Her friends are trying to line her up with Pete, a handsome (of course) local veterinarian.
Pete and Keira miss each other on the blind date their friends set up, but they run into each other later and figure it out. Except maybe not: Pete has been burned before by dating a single mother and getting deeply involved in the life of her son, falling in love with the boy as much as the mom. The breakup was so painful that he's made a hard-and-fast rule not to date single mothers ever again.
So despite their mutual attraction, he reluctantly tells her he can't pursue the relationship. Keira takes this way harder than it probably deserves given how little time they've spent together at that point, but I have to admit I've been there myself and it's not as far-fetched as it might seem. Meanwhile, Pete is trying not to second-guess himself, telling himself over and over again that his rule against single moms is a GOOD idea, especially since they keep running into each other. This got old REALLY fast, BTW. I mean, no reader believes for a second that he won't change his mind, and the negative motivation seemed foolish here.
Anyway, Keira decides to get her 4 year old son a dog, and Pete gets involved because, why not? They're just friends! And he knows dogs and can help!!
The son is very cute. The dogs are even cuter. Pete is ... nice but forgettable, except for his being so stubborn about his rule whilst sending ALL KINDS of mixed signals to Keira. Also, the book needed another good proofreading pass; I noticed a few glaring misspellings. (Glaring to me, anyway. Things like "diffused" instead of "defused.")
Some discussion of prayer and faith, and the romance is squeaky clean.
Kindle freebie romance time again. A Dangerous Madness mixes the usual romance with a historical event - the 1812 murder of Spencer Perceval, the BritKindle freebie romance time again. A Dangerous Madness mixes the usual romance with a historical event - the 1812 murder of Spencer Perceval, the British prime minister, by one John Bellingham, a Liverpool merchant - and turns it into a conspiracy mystery. Bellingham may or may not be delusional, and may have been egged on by unknown conspirators.
All Miss Phoebe Hillier knows is that her rather foolish and pompous fiancé was somehow involved with Bellingham, right before he jilted her and took off for the Continent ... and that she's now in danger because of it.
The Duke of Wittaker, a man with a reputation as a rake and scoundrel, is involved with a private investigation of the murder, which leads him to Phoebe. Phoebe is reluctant to trust him (or anyone really) but she may not have a choice once shots start getting fired.
I liked the developing relationship between Phoebe and Wittaker, one of the very few men who really sees her as an intelligent person and respects her for it. The premise for the murder mystery was intriguing. It dragged the pace down for me a little during most of the book (I would have liked more romance and less investigation) but the wrap-up was very good, as was the author's afterword.
This worked pretty well as a stand-alone read, though I could tell the some of the secondary characters (who were the main characters in the prior books) were supposed to be more significant to me than they actually were.
This novel lost at least a full star because (a) punctuation and spelling errors were frequent enough to distract me (better proofreading please!) and (b) even though you could technically call this a clean read (kisses only), it irks me in Regencyland when unmarried ladies act out of line for the times.(view spoiler)[ Phoebe decides to embark on an affair with the duke notwithstanding she's already in scandalous territory because of being dumped by her fiancé and because she's been seen keeping company with the duke, who has a Reputation. Even after he tells her he loves her and wants to marry her, and she's in love with him, she's not ready to commit to marriage yet. But she's up for sleeping with him for a while first. And that's where the book ends.(hide spoiler)] Whatever....more
A weak 3 stars for this squeaky clean contemporary romance, which I picked up as a freebie last year, read and immediately forgot all about it, until A weak 3 stars for this squeaky clean contemporary romance, which I picked up as a freebie last year, read and immediately forgot all about it, until Tandie and I were chatting about it this afternoon in the comments to her review. I had recommended another Jennifer Peel book to her (Rachel Laine, which BTW I think is much better than this one), but she read this one instead. I thought I hadn't read this book, but I happened to click on the Amazon link and surprise! I'd already picked it up as a freebie last year. Not only that, but I'd clearly read it, since the copy on my Kindle was at 100%. I was all, whaaattt? since I didn't remember it at all, so I spent an hour or so tonight rereading it. Bad call. It reminded me how very mediocre this book was, and just why I'd completely forgotten it.
Our heroine Charlee (Yeah. Her dad wanted a son) has had a crush on Ryan since she was a teenager, but the problem is, he's 8 years older. So he (wisely) ignored her, and (not so wisely) married a hot redhead who wasn't really into him. Meanwhile Charlee had moved out of state with her mom when her parents divorced, and had a rough several years while her mom had a downward spiral. Now Charlee's around 25, moving back home to Colorado with her father to join his accounting firm--where Ryan, who is now a single dad of a super cute little boy, also works.
Ryan still kind of views Charlee as too young for him, even though his eyes are telling him otherwise, and he's also trying to keep peace with his high-maintenance ex-wife, who doesn't approve of Charlee. But they become jogging buddies, and she babysits his kids, and they do a little light flirting. Which eventually starts turning into something more, even though Ryan blows hot and cold with Charlee like you wouldn't believe. He treats her poorly, she tells him to get lost, he begs for another chance, she agrees. Lather, rinse, repeat.
My biggest problem with this book is that is felt like I was reading some girl's diary rather than an actual book. Lots of pedestrian details, he did this, she said that, on and on. It could have used some serious tightening up and a round of editing by someone who really knows spelling (there were a few eyebrow-raising misspellings where the wrong homonym was used). Also, Jennifer Peel tends to go a bit too often to the well of virtuous woman who the guy mistreats and then has to plead for her to give him another chance. I know her romances are wish fulfillment reading and all, but still.
I recommend this one only for non-critical clean romance readers. ...more
Very cute and fluffy romance novella (other than a subplot about a high school student with an abusive stepfather). Plus Christmas! And bonus points fVery cute and fluffy romance novella (other than a subplot about a high school student with an abusive stepfather). Plus Christmas! And bonus points for a seriously athletic heroine, a high school teacher, who isn't all into makeup and clothes (and despite the title, the guys actually love her the way she is, though they do appreciate the effort when she dresses up).
It's a total wish fulfillment plot, about an old crush who comes back into town, but if you love those sweet contemporary romances and aren't too picky about punctuation, deep and meaningful plots, etc., have at it! There are some nice romance and Christmas feelz in this one, and you can easily read it in an evening ... by a fire with a nice cup of hot chocolate ... and maybe some cookies ......more
Fifteen year old Elizabeth Yale has been living alone with her mother for eight years, since her fatheFull review, first posted on Fantasy Literature:
Fifteen year old Elizabeth Yale has been living alone with her mother for eight years, since her father suffered an untimely death and her beloved grandfather Jack, unable to cope with the tragedy, left town to travel around the world. Elizabeth has missed Jack terribly, so she’s delighted when she gets a letter from Jack announcing that he’s coming home, and even more excited when her mother agrees to let her take a trip to Morocco with Jack in a few days. But unexpected troubles postpone their Casablanca adventure.
Jack has brought an unusual gift home for Elizabeth, an antique typewriter. Elizabeth has an uneasy feeling about the typewriter, especially when Jack insists that she touch the keys. At first nothing happens, but then the typewriter bursts into life with a Pop-Whiz-BANG!, shooting streams of brightly colored sparks and lit-up letters into the air and causing the room to shake violently. When Elizabeth types a message on the keys, the typewriter types a response: “It’s a lie. All of it, a lie.” The machine soon informs Elizabeth that history is not right and she needs to correct it. Its cryptic messages gradually lead Elizabeth and her grandfather down a path to explore their family’s past ― including a family curse that has killed before, and is waiting to kill again. It’s a race to solve the mystery before anyone else dies!
Danielle A. Vann has created an original middle grade mystery in The Whizbang Machine (2016), with a unique concept, the ancient, magical typewriter, at the center of it, and an engaging mystery. Unfortunately the execution of the idea is lacking in many ways. Elizabeth is frustratingly juvenile for her age. She whines constantly, talks back to adults, and makes some impulsive, questionable decisions. Her dialogue and character would be a better fit for a twelve or thirteen year old girl than one who’s turning sixteen in a few weeks.
Her grandfather Jack is just as bad: he takes several actions that clearly don’t have Elizabeth’s best interests at heart, apparently out of impatience or selfish curiosity, like urging Elizabeth to touch the machine again after it’s burnt her fingers badly, sneaking with her into locked buildings, or taking her into danger. His character shifts, from a concerned and loving grandparent to a reckless adventurer and back again, are disconcerting.
Additionally, The Whizbang Machine needed much stronger editing and proofreading. There are repeated punctuation errors, particularly in the dialogue. This book has a desperate case of “saidism” (aka “said bookism”), where the author seems to be allergic to the simple word “said.” Everything that comes out of a character’s mouth is laughed, chomped, uttered, whined, smiled, etc. It got highly distracting after a while, especially when there was a particularly odd choice of verb, such as: “ ‘Yes,’ Jack rushed” or “ ‘The choir must be practicing,’ the man delighted.” Sometimes the word used is also inappropriate for the context, like when “ ‘Unbelievable,’ I laughed” appears in the midst of a serious discussion.
This passage is illustrative of most of the problems I’ve mentioned:
Throttling his hand forward, he opened it and closed it repeatedly, “Hand me the blue map pencil now, young lady,” he demanded.
“Why should I?” I hissed.
“Now!” he demanded.
Jack stewed in his building annoyance, “Sir,” Grandpa Jack began. “That is no way to speak to a young lady.”
Younger teenage readers may not mind these literary shortcomings. On the positive side, the plot is generally fast-paced. There’s some exciting action as Jack and Elizabeth travel to far-off places in search of the answers to the mystery and the key to unlocking the curse. However, be aware that The Whizbang Machine ends on a major cliffhanger, with the mystery unresolved. Readers will have to wait for the publication of the sequel, Tunney’s Curse, to get more answers.
I received a free copy of this book from the publisher in exchange for a review. Thank you!...more
Last night I decided to start reading Jorge Luis Borges' Ficciones for my 2016 Classics Bingo Challenge. It's very intricately written and I think truLast night I decided to start reading Jorge Luis Borges' Ficciones for my 2016 Classics Bingo Challenge. It's very intricately written and I think true enjoyment of it requires more in-depth knowledge of philosophy than I have at my fingertips. On about page 25, the trumpet sounded in my brain and I retreated in confusion. While regrouping, I hopped over to the other end of the literary spectrum and spent an hour with this fluffy romance (just resting my brain before attacking Ficciones again. Yup. That's it.).
Alyssa is a well-known photographer, living in Hawaii, with a painful past due to a sleazy father. The gimmick here is that when she was a teenager, Alyssa and her girlfriends wrote down a pact to marry billionaires and live happily ever after. But really Alyssa hates rich guys and thinks they're all users like her dad (she's had some really bad experiences). Can retired hockey player/wealthy and (of course) handsome businessman Beckham change her mind? And what if Beck finds out that when Alyssa was a starving young photographer years ago, she took some pictures of him coming out of his dad's funeral for a sleazy tabloid?
This is what it is: a Kindle freebie fluffy romance, sprinkled with punctuation and grammar errors (e.g., "Who's [instead of "whose"] granddaughter are you?"), that stays pretty superficial throughout, despite Alyssa dealing with some PTSD-type issues from her father's awful treatment of her when she was younger. It had its moments (Alyssa's Granny was a great character), and non-critical romance readers will probably love it, but I can't recommend it to anyone else. Even for free.
How can a historical romance that contains so much manufactured drama be so banal? How many different ways can a heroine find to be an idiot? How hardHow can a historical romance that contains so much manufactured drama be so banal? How many different ways can a heroine find to be an idiot? How hard is it to find a competent proofreader to fix your punctuation?
In this Austen fanfic bit of fluff, we have Mr. Darcy falling off his horse and injuring himself--including a really nasty bump on the head--immediateIn this Austen fanfic bit of fluff, we have Mr. Darcy falling off his horse and injuring himself--including a really nasty bump on the head--immediately after giving Elizabeth Bennet his letter after she refuses his first proposal. Darcy is taken to the Collins' vicarage to recuperate. It soon develops that he has limited amnesia and can't remember the last couple of days, including his proposal. Worse yet, every time he goes to sleep, he forgets those couple of days plus everything that's happened since. Think 50 First Dates. So he keeps proposing to Elizabeth, every day, not remembering he's done it before. Will his proposals get any better? Will Lizzie's heart soften? [image] It's a very silly but harmless romance, but what put me over the edge (besides several proofreading errors, like "paused for dramatic affect" and "had to reign in their kisses" and rampant punctuation issues) were the terrible characterization--these characters are almost nothing like the actual ones in P&P--and the truly awful dialogue, with a supreme disregard for Regency-era manners of speaking and mores. There are lots of lines like these:
Nurse (!) to Elizabeth: "Your body language seemed disrespectful, not at all how a lady would behave toward her host. But I see now that he is family, and one does not choose family—they kind of come as a package deal. You have to deal with them, no matter how they are.” (Did people say "kind of"? Or talk about "body language" or "package deals"? Would a nurse ever presume to talk like this to a lady she's just recently met?)
Darcy: "Well, that explains a lot."
Elizabeth thinking to herself: "Oops. Fell into that one."
Mr. Bennet thinking to himself: "These poor, love-struck kids." ("Kids??")
Mr. Bennet to Darcy (!): “We do not want any roamin’ hands or rushin’ fingers, do we?” (Whut???)
Darcy also (1) cries, (2) prays, (3) sings to Elizabeth, and (4) tells a group of people that Lady Catherine was actually the daughter of a servant woman, that she had a youthful incestuous affair with a stable hand who was actually her birth mother's brother, and Anne is his illegitimate daughter. o.O
If this kind of stuff doesn't bother you, and you like Austen takeoffs with lots of kissy-face scenes, have fun! Otherwise give this one a wide berth. It's really not worth the time I spent skimming it and writing this review....more
"A piece of trash" pretty much describes the main character--racist, sexist and boorish in just about every way--which might or not be a showstopper, "A piece of trash" pretty much describes the main character--racist, sexist and boorish in just about every way--which might or not be a showstopper, depending on how the story itself is written. Unfortunately, the writing is amateurish and riddled with spelling and grammar mistakes and profanity. The plot seems deliberately designed to make you despise the main character. I intended to read the whole thing but literally couldn't bring myself to do it, but I read enough to know that Kelly's review is spot-on. https://www.goodreads.com/review/show......more
So I had just finished a long, very complex fantasy and I was all, "Brain candy time!!" and grabbed the nearest romance, which happened to be this KinSo I had just finished a long, very complex fantasy and I was all, "Brain candy time!!" and grabbed the nearest romance, which happened to be this Kindle freebie. And immediately, on the first page, I run into this sentence:
She ran out of her bedroom and past her sister, Ivy, who was coming out of the bathroom with a towel around her head and rushed down the stairs and out into the gentle sunlight.
And on the second page we have this:
"I'm Rayne Nyman the new owner of this home."
If you like squeaky clean romances and (a) don't see anything wrong with these sentences, or (b) do see what's wrong but don't particularly care, you'll probably like this novel, as long as you also like reading this kind of book:
He. Was. Beautiful. She'd never in her life seen cheekbones like his. And his eyes were such a light shade of blue they were almost silver. Forget landscaping, this guy should be modeling.
There are a lot of random, meaningless spats between the main couple that come out of left field and are just as quickly settled, and a subplot with an evil baddie that is (presumably) resolved in a later book in this series but is left open here. It's all pretty superficial, but if you just want a quick romantic rush and aren't a grammar Nazi like I am, you may like this book. All I can say is, once again, commas can be your friends! [image]...more
Despite some recent controversy, I decided to give this story a chance since I like science fiction short stories, particularly when they're free. TheDespite some recent controversy, I decided to give this story a chance since I like science fiction short stories, particularly when they're free. The setting in this story is a future New York City, where theater has evolved to include audience participation. (Otherwise, there's not really much at all that's sci fi about it.) This particular play, "Sleep Walking," is hanging on by its fingernails, with the cast and staff hoping something will happen to make it a hit. Umm--that's about it. It's moody and atmospheric, but kind of disjointed and confusing. When I finished it, I felt like I'd been wandering around aimlessly for 30 minutes, like one of the audience participants in the play.
It's not terrible, but I wish I'd spent that half hour doing something else, like petting the cat or taking a nap.
Also: what is terrible is the proofreading. Shouldn't Tor do a better job with stories it publishes on its website?
1.5 stars, DNF. On second thought, let's not read Fateful. 'Tis a silly book.
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Abandoned at 45% after an encounter with cutesie little winged fa1.5 stars, DNF. On second thought, let's not read Fateful. 'Tis a silly book.
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Abandoned at 45% after an encounter with cutesie little winged fairies, because the conversation with the fairies induced severe eye-rolling, and that was seriously the last straw. At that point I skipped to the end and read it just to satisfy my curiosity.
Set in London, this is a Twilight wannabe, except not as well written. That may be hard to believe for some, but trust me on this. Also, I really should have stopped right away when I realized this was a story about a girl in love with a vampire, with whom she shares some indescribable connection, AND the vampire sucks blood out of animals instead of people because he's such a good guy, AND he has superhuman strength and unimaginably good looks, AND daylight/garlic/crosses don't bother him, AND he and his friends have to protect her from other vampires who aren't such good guys . . .
If you love the Twilight series and want to read more like it, and you're not overly particular about spelling and grammar, or depth and subtlety in writing, you'll probably enjoy this. The vampire mythology has a few differences that are mildly interesting, but it wasn't enough to get me to read the whole book. I'm just glad I didn't pay anything for it.
Two stars for this freebie TwiLite clone. This is about as close to Twilight as you can get without actually having anyone's blood get sucked out of tTwo stars for this freebie TwiLite clone. This is about as close to Twilight as you can get without actually having anyone's blood get sucked out of their neck (except that it has far worse grammar and punctuation problems). I think it's time for a GoodReads Game®: how many parallels can we find between Significance and Twilight? (Mildly spoilerish so read at your own risk.)
1. Main character is a high school girl living with her divorced dad. 2. Insta-love, on steroids. 3. Oh no, her love interest is not quite human! 4. And he is compelled by his immense love for her to be a stalker and extremely possessive! 5. But it's okay, because she loves him too. 6. Especially when he creepily watches her sleep every night has to sleep chastely touching her all night long. 7. Aww! His family is so sweet, and even though they have superpowers they love human girl. 8. Cool! If she hangs out with him long enough she will be changed and get to have superpowers too! 9. Even cooler! The change process instantly makes her (more) beautiful! 10. But even before this magical change, isn't it weird how all these guys want her even though she doesn't think she's anything special? 11. Mind reading: it's equal opportunity now. 12. Oh no, not-quite-human guy has enemies who want to do terrible things to our heroine!
. . . and so on.
If you really loved Twilight, you'll probably like Significance. If not, don't even crack it open, even if it's free. No werewolf love triangle, though, so there's that. Though--sorry!--there is instant imprinting. Also, maybe a love triangle shows up later in this series. There's always hope! Unfortunately, I'll never know.
ETA: Downgrading my rating to take away the extra half star. I'm stingier now than I was when I originally wrote this review....more
So I read this about a year ago when I was going through a Kindle freebie marathon phase, not being terribly picky about what I read, and this ended uSo I read this about a year ago when I was going through a Kindle freebie marathon phase, not being terribly picky about what I read, and this ended up landing me with more than my fair share of YA paranormal romances--which was probably a major contributing factor toward me getting a library card again (after being too cheap to do so for several years, b/c $75/year when you don't live in the city boundaries) and swearing off PNR for a while.
Anyway: this book. I feel like I owe it more than the one-line review that I gave it last year. So here's the deal: If you're Team Jacob all the way, and wish all those pesky vampires would go away and let you enjoy some wolf-kissin', you could do worse than this book. Like, for example, Prince of Wolves. That's definitely worse. This book was self-pubbed so there are the typical issues with sketchy grammar and punctuation, and writing that tends to the gushy and superficial side of the spectrum. Still, if romance feelz are what you're going for, but you want to keep things clean and . . . um, wolfy . . . here you go. ...more
Kindle freebie. Two and a half stars for this New Adult science fiction/romance short novel (basically a YA novel, but with a few sex scenes). The preKindle freebie. Two and a half stars for this New Adult science fiction/romance short novel (basically a YA novel, but with a few sex scenes). The premise was interesting (young girl left her body to science when she died; the scientists who got her body illegally resurrected her as a cyborg). However, the execution leaves something to be desired. The main character isn't as smart or informed as a cyborg ought to be, and her relationship with the genius 20 year old handsome scientist (does such a person even exist? I've never seen one....) who helped create her was, let's just say, not the ultimate in realism. The story also started building up to a climax and then kind of wimped out and took the easy way out, just to set us up for some Bionic Woman-type sequels.
Not too bad for what I'm assuming is a self-published book, but there are quite a few typos and grammar problems....more
Nooooo ... don't do it! Don't download this book even if it's free, unless you're a paranormal romance fan who loves gushy romances and couldn't care Nooooo ... don't do it! Don't download this book even if it's free, unless you're a paranormal romance fan who loves gushy romances and couldn't care less about good writing. (Seriously, see my Q&A below.)
There's a decent teen paranormal romance novel trying to break through the fanfic writing here but, Houston, we have a problem. Luckily for all of you, I have the solution!
This is a simple quiz question for you denizens of GR. Here's a sample of a few lines from the very first page of Prince of Wolves. (Trust me, I have very carefully transcribed it, including the punctuation. Or lack thereof.) Please read it and answer the multiple choice question below:
Wow, I mean wow, is all Jacque could think. Jacque couldn't even imagine what his entire face must look like. He was tall, probably six foot one or so, his hair was jet black, it was longer on top and she could tell that he had bangs that fell across his face sweeping to the left partially covering that eye. He had broad shoulders and from what she could see of his profile, high cheek bones, a straight nose and full lips. She quickly realized her mouth had dropped open and she was all but drooling over the handsome human being who had emerged from the vehicle. She watched as he and his driver conversed, it all seemed very formal until the driver suddenly hugged the boy with obvious deep affection. He must be more than his driver Jacque thought.
Q: Upon reading this paragraph, what was your first reaction?
A: (a) OMG, that's SO romantic! I wish I could meet a guy like that! (b) The writing and grammar are atrocious! Who in the heck proofread this book? I hope the author didn't pay them ... (c) You bullies and haters need to just leave this book alone! Team Jacob Fane for the win! (d) HAHAHAHA! ... sorry, what was the question?
If your answer was (a) or (c), have a great time reading this book and all of its many sequels. You'll enjoy it, at least until you go to college.
If your answer was (b) or (d), do not pass GO and--seriously--do not download or read this book, even if it's free. The rest of the book is just like the paragraph above.
One star. It has a few interesting ideas and plot turns, but in the end it's a fail for me. The overly gushy writing, the typos, misspelled words, and awful grammar: it's overwhelming. A hot mess that will be enjoyed only by completely non-critical PNR lovers....more
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