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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see what it takes to make this a featured article. Specifically, focus on article tone, lede, and summary style.

Thanks, X750. Spin a yarn? _{Articles I've screwed over?} 10:03, 8 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, great article! The lede generally looks good. I think that one thing I'd say is that the last sentence could probably be simplified (With the amounts of mechanical grip the car and tires could provide...).

If my understanding is correct, the last sentence is expanding on the sentence before it by explaining in more detail (1) what type of influence this car has had on F1 car design (specifically, the aero) and (2) specifically who adopted these changes. I think that it would help if the dependent clause With the amounts of mechanical grip... was shortened or cut. It disrupts the flow b/w the last and 2nd to last sentences, and doesn't add much to conveying ideas (1) and (2). spintheer (talk) 06:12, 19 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks spintheer. I'll get around to clarifying these later. Best, X750. Spin a yarn? _{Articles I've screwed over?} 00:07, 25 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I have added the article to the Template:FAC peer review sidebar. Please consider reviewing other articles posted there. Z1720 (talk) 17:01, 20 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@X750: It has been over a month since the last comment. Are you still looking for feedback, or can this be closed? Z1720 (talk) 15:47, 24 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello Z1720, seeing as no one else has commented, I will work on this article today and following what spintheer thinks of my changes - then this can be closed. Real life events have prevented me from being active on this website. Best, X750. Spin a yarn? _{Articles I've screwed over?} 00:09, 25 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@X750: When you are ready to close, the instructions are at WP:PRG. I recommend using the script. Z1720 (talk) 00:36, 25 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Understood. Thank you. X750. Spin a yarn? _{Articles I've screwed over?} 00:51, 25 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]